STEP TWO: Add linkers, adjectives, adverbs and story references to improve your story.
On the evening of 1st June, a not-so-smart/ careless / brainless / dim-witted / stupid French burglar broke into a modern, 2-storey house in Paris. He first started stealing gold and silver things in the warm living room. Then, just as he was going to leave, his stomach began rumbling. So he peeped into the fridge and saw his favourite blue cheese, sat down and ate it quickly / devoured it drooling. While he was enjoying his meal, he remembered the two expensive, cold champagne bottles to drench his thirst.
((He was thirsty, so he drank two bottles of champagne.)) After that/ Afterwards / Later, he felt so
tired that he decided to take a quick/short nap. Unfortunately, he fell sound
asleep. The next morning, who woke him up? A snickering French policeman who tapped on sleeping-beauty’s shoulder.
Don't forget:
Order of Adjectives
OPINION
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SIZE
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SHAPE
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AGE
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COLOUR
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NATION-
ALITY |
MATER-
IAL |
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dim-
witted, |
French
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burglar
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Small,
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Round,
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ancient /
100-
year- old, |
black,
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white-handed clock
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2-year-
old, |
silver and white,
|
glass
and steel |
mobile phone
|
wow
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